Fixing a surface features writing!

G'day my amazing readers,

In room 9 we are learning to fix a surface features. Surface features are a little bit in the writing that we need to fix. Surface is punctuation spelling repeated words. We are doing this to improve in our writing by rereading it and fixing the mistakes in our writing. 

An example is: thissentsaChulymakessen Zbuttisrellyhrd to reed. The sentence has no surface features. We also changed our writing because there were to many of the same words.

On the room 9 site weekly writing there is a link that takes you to a document that we made a copy of the document. And then starting fixing the mistakes. Here is the instructions and the document:

Reading 1

Find the ends of the sentences. 

To do this: 

Look for each time a person or thing is mentioned again.

Look for when a new piece of information is given.

Think about where you pause to make sense of what you are reading.

Reading 2

Highlight the most repeated word.

Can you fix it?

Reading 3

Does this feel easier to read now?

How many sentences start the same way?

Kai kept absolutely still as the footsteps got louder. He tried not to suffocate as he laid under the bed. He was wondering what had happened to his brother and his family. The man with the knife in his hand stormed around the house.

 Mum has had boyfriends before but we had not thought that they would ever find us. Maybe Elijah was one of them looking for revenge, but why would he come? Mum would just move and how did he find us? We live on the other side of the planet from where all of mum’s boyfriends were. So how could Elijah find us. He might have put a tracker on mum when he last saw her or on one of her devices.

‘Hello where are you? I know you're here. You're going to tell me where your mother is or you shall join your father... in the skies so which will it be, death or freedom! You have 10 seconds to choose wisely’.

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